Tham khảo tài liệu 'steps to writing well_3', ngoại ngữ, kỹ năng viết tiếng anh phục vụ nhu cầu học tập, nghiên cứu và làm việc hiệu quả | CHAPTER 6 - EFFECTIVE SENTENCES 129 Wordy prose is frequently the result of using one or more of the following 1 deadwood constructions 2 redundancies 3 pretentious diction. Avoid Deadwood Constructions Always try to cut empty deadwood from your sentences. Having a clear concise style does not mean limiting your writing to choppy childish Dick-and-Jane sentences it only means that all unnecessary words phrases and clauses should be deleted. Here are some sentences containing common deadwood constructions and ways they may be pruned Poor The reason the starving novelist drove 50 miles to a new restaurant was because it was serving his favorite chicken dish Pullet Surprise. The reason . . . was because is both wordy and ungrammatical. If you have a reason you don t need a reason because. Revised The starving novelist drove 50 miles to a new restaurant because it was serving his favorite chicken dish Pullet Surprise. Poor The land settlement was an example where my client Ms. Patti O. Furniture did not receive fair treatment. Revised The land settlement was unfair to my client Ms. Patti O. Furniture. Poor Because of the fact that his surfboard business failed after only a month my brother decided to leave Minnesota. Revised Because his surfboard business failed after only a month my brother decided to leave Minnesota. Other notorious deadwood constructions include the following regardless of the fact that due to the fact that the reason is that as to whether or not to at this point in time it is believed that concerning the matter of by means of these are the kinds of . that use although use because omit omit as to and or not use now or today use a specific subject and believes use about use by use these plus a specific subject Watch a tendency to tack on empty fillers that stretch one word into an awkward phrase Wordy Each candidate should be evaluated on an individual basis. Concise Each candidate should be evaluated individually. 130 PART ONE - THE BASICS OF THE .
