Tham khảo tài liệu 'the official guide to the toefl ibt third edition part 51', ngoại ngữ, toefl - ielts - toeic phục vụ nhu cầu học tập, nghiên cứu và làm việc hiệu quả | Answers Explanations and Listening Scripts Score 2 Essay Sample 1 In my opinion it is better when adults live with their families for a longer time. Some young adults make a big mistake going away from their want independence but sometimes it can cause a lot of lot of young adults in my country depend of their they can do whatever they can find a job earn their own money start a family and so one but they prefer to stay wiht their families and be my country parents allways care about their support them by giving money some you are young adults you can allways ask your parents about help and they will s Rater s Comments Limited in development and lacking any organizing principle this essay is squarely in the 2 range. The generalizations made are only barely supported. There are errors prefer to stay with their families and be depended ask your parents about help but it is the lack of development and extremely unclear connections between ideas A lot of young adults in my country depend of their parents. Ofcause they can do whatever they want that limit this essay to a score of 2. Score 2 Essay Sample 2 In my opoinion young adults live with their families longer time is better than they become independent from their parents because they can recive living supports and advise from their parents. Some young adults want live by themselves eventhought they are not financialy independent. Therefore their credit history is destoryed by irresponsible payments. Futhermore when they have their own family these credit dermages cause their worsest future. If they live with their family they can get great advise from their family who know them very well. For example when they are in great denger sutuation only their family come to resucu them so they can protect them self. For these resons I think that young adults live with their families for long time is better than they become independent .
