Tham khảo tài liệu 'about the ged writing exam10', ngoại ngữ, anh ngữ phổ thông phục vụ nhu cầu học tập, nghiên cứu và làm việc hiệu quả | WRITING AN EFFECTIVE ESSAY the same paragraph revised to show variety in sentence structure She is a teacher and lives on a ranch in Montana with her cat and dog. Because she has family in California she travels there frequently. Notice how much more interesting this paragraph is now. The seven sentences have been combined into two and only one sentence starts with she. Many of the short sentences have been turned into modifiers that make for more varied sentence patterns. Sentence structure and punctuation can also be used to manipulate emphasis. The best place to put sentence elements that you want to emphasize is at the end the save the best for last approach . What comes last is what lingers longest in the readers ears. He is tall dark and handsome. The emphasis is on handsome. If tall is the most important characteristic then that should come last. She is smart reliable and experienced. The emphasis is on experienced if smart is the most important characteristic then that should be last in the list. You can also use an em dash to set off part of a sentence for emphasis He is tall dark handsome and married. Here the stress on the last element is heightened by the dash which emphasizes the sense of disappointment in the sentence. Don t Repeat Repeat Yourself On the sentence level in general less is more. The fewer words you use to get your point across the better. Redundancy is the unnecessary repetition of ideas. Wordiness is the use of several words when a few can express the same idea more clearly and concisely. Avoid both of these as you write your essay. Wordiness and redundancy typically result from three causes ậ The use of unnecessary words or phrases Redundant Turn left at the green-colored house. Correct Turn left at the green house. ậ Unnecessary repetition of nouns or pronouns Redundant Riva she couldn t believe her ears. Correct Riva couldn t believe her ears. ậ The use of wordy phrases instead of adverbs Wordy She spoke in a very convincing manner.
