Quá lớn cho gia đình cô ấy cần một nơi để sống có thể đi bộ qua nhà nước trong một vài phút Trung loại của câu chuyện để viết và chọn một chủ đề? ■ Các bạn nghĩ Lasso với kích thước Thay đổi sợi dây thừng của nhà nước | Better Sentences As you revise your draft check your sentences to make sure they go together well. Read the sentences aloud. Are they all short Do they repeat words and sound choppy If so you may want to combine two short sentences into one longer sentence. Sometimes you can combine sentences by joining two nouns. and o You can use mixed birdseed. You can use sunflower seeds. PREWRITE DRAFT PROOFREAD PUBLISH Practice and Apply Revise Your Own Instructions 1. Take out information that is not necessary. 2. Add details that will make your writing clearer and more interesting. 3. Add time-order or space-order words. 4. Grammar Can you combine any short sentences TECHNOLOGY When you begin revising your draft you can rename your work using the SAVE AS feature so that you can cut and paste from the original work if you change your mind. 79 How-to Writing - Revise Peer Conferencing Share your first draft with a partner. Your partner may have some helpful suggestions. This sounds Kike un to do Good ending you can make a treat to feed birds. First gather foods that birds like. You can use mixed birdseed. You can use sunflower seeds. Add some chopped peanuts raisins or coconut flakes. You also need some suet to hold the foods together. Put all the ingredients in a bowl and mix them together Press down hard to form a cake. Chill the cake. When the suet cake is firm remove it from the bowl. Put the birds treet outside where they can reach it safely. Finally have fun watching the birds enjoy their treat Conferencing for file Reader Does your partner s piece have the features of explanatory writing tells how to do or make something step-by-step instructions clear details time-order or space-order words Be sure to tell your partner what you liked about the piece as well as ways to improve it. 80 As you revise your instructions think about your partner s comments and suggestions. This writer made some changes based on his partner s ideas. PREWRITE DRAFT REVISE REVISE How to make a
